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Guest Gringoire

Ballpoint Pen Or Whatever...

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Guest Taro

the very best thing that I think you did here was .. perspective. This audi a4/6 looks pretty correct.

 

the bad things you did are : (sorry if a bit harsh)

 

- you need to get rid of those lines that goes off to nowhere. I mean, your drawing to a certain point, not like drawing a random line, then pick a spot in the line to continue on... its a really bad habit, in both traditional art and ID art.

 

- your method of shading is NOT working for you. Cross hatch is not a good idea. To me, your drawing to create gradient with cross hatch, which is bad. To create gradient, its better to just colour it in, or get a marker. Even shading just single strokes is better than cross hatch.

 

-put in more lineweight, and watch out for lineweight. This should be your process: light sketch ---> add lineweight over it. I hope that for every dark line you are adding in, you are thinking beforehand. You cannot add lineweight to where you THINK should have lineweight, you need to think and be more precise on every line. Otherwise do a sketchy style car next time.

 

-I can't really read what those words say, but unless they are call outs, maybe its the best to leave them out right now. Plus, they are not in a good spot.

 

 

 

if u dont understand, here : srry for the roughness

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this is acutally not bad.

 

those lines can be there, that taro circled in greeen

however i think the problem is that, its more along the lines of all the lines are approximately the same line weight.

 

so if those lines were lighter, it wouldve looked alot better.

 

but not bad man, keep at it, im seeing progress.

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Guest Gringoire

Ok... so now, the main problem is the thickness of my lines... and where they should "put on weight" ... and where they should "loose weight"... I seem to understand this point, thank you Taro and Sketchyd! ...will be back with some more...

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Guest Gringoire

The first one is a "preview" sketch, rough, just for orientation... it's about an Q9 concept... but I've kept several Q7 features... Now I found out that cross lines aren't suitable for me... They only appear on window shadowing... And the dirty spots are some accidental "eau du toilet" drops... sorry for the mess... thank you!

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Guest Taro

improving! but not quite yet.

 

lets just ignore the messy one and talk about the second one.

 

- take care of your sketches ;/ unfortunately if that dot was on a final render of a project huh? lol

- I still don't think cross hatch shading is working here, even if its just on window. I suggest.. if you really want to shade, get a marker or a high lighter or a sharpie, just for a bit of contrast.

-line weight.. hmm, they have to apply for the whole object, not just the bottom of the car and wheels.

. when your done your rough sketch, think about where should OBVIOUSLY be the darkest and lightest, then work your way in.

 

 

so.. good job, and keep working on that line weight. You can even be really dramatic if you want.

 

 

 

edit :

 

take your shadow more seriously if you are going to do it, because that is a really weird shadow. Also, the shadow and the wheel will NEVER stick together and become one piece, so draw them seperately. The only case that the shadow and wheel can look 'mixed' is when its.. REALLY dark... which is not your case

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Guest Gringoire

Checkout this thing... my first "edit in photoshop... anyway I'd like to hear some opinions about my little Intro... thank you!

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Guest Deysc

i like the words. The yellow seems to disappear into the smokey background. Was it intentional to hide the sketch?

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Guest qitnic

Hi!

 

Try to read yellow text on white paper.

Dynamic is everything... interesting.

Don't use concept when you don't know its definition.

Dynamic design means everything from real to virtual? I stop here.

The good thing is that you call it an intro, so that you can explain yourself later in time.

You're writing as if your statements are true facts.

Your intro is good for someone who doesn't know about the subject. But if you do then it's not good.

 

Sorry if I'm too harch.

 

/qitnic

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Guest Taro

a bit creepy the intro page.

 

its very rough lol

 

and your words sounds really nice, yet they r sooooo vague.

They don't have any meanings, and if you read it and think it... they don't make too much sense.

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Guest Gringoire
i like the words. The yellow seems to disappear into the smokey background. Was it intentional to hide the sketch?

Yes it was... thank you!

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Don't use the "intro", it's confusing and weird.

 

Always fully explain your concept and if absolutely necessary use words. You're a designer not a philosopher.

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Guest Austin Brown

about the sketch...your lineweights are pretty good and the style of the sketching is great. Of course, there are problems...get rid of the cross-hatching. it is not "design-y". clean up the shadow. I've see designer's blend the wheels and shadow together but not the same way that you did. Your lineweights are getting better but you need to be consistent. When a car pulls up to your face, what part is the most detailed? The headlights and grille - the closest parts to your face. But here, they are almost ghosts. Too little contrast. Too little lineweight. Your accuracy is amazing though. Your lines all seem to fall more or less where they belong.

 

Overall, this certainly qualifies as a pen sketch. It is far enough from your fine arts style to be called something different, and for that I congratulate you.

 

I don't really like the whole philosophy thing, but that's a personal thing. Stick with getting your sketches to the point that they can speak for themselves. Then you won't have to write messages on their behalf.

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Guest Kaiyuan

The crosshatching reminds me of being in a plane and looking down at the patches of farm under you.

The shadow looks like a bubble, especially the part farthest from the eye, if the side isn't curving upwards, I don't think the shadow should either.

Also your front ellipse looks like a football. Try making a full ellipse instead of drawing the two sides and having them meet at the top and bottom, or so it seems.

 

It's a big improvement from your other sketches. Keep it up.

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Guest Gringoire

I just got back from a vacation @ the mountains so I didn't post anything for some several days... thank you for the advices and I will start posting soon...

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